35 thoughts on “I will come back to haunt you

  1. Gabrielle, this is very profound!! .. chilling message and effective use of language. I love it! Thanks for sharing ~ BlueGem

  2. This poem has got me thinking about the many harrowing intrigues behind the fact of the missing person – the reasons behind why someone intentionally slips from the face of earth without a trace (and am incredulous at how easy it seems to do this)

    • intentionally or unintentionally bluebee (that is what causes some of the distress I am sure – the not knowing if they have come across foul play) – I have thought about it a lot too – why can’t they just phone or write a letter saying they are never coming back – lots to do with guilt I am sure, and thinking they will be pressured into returning.

    • I have been meaning to write a ghost poem for a while now, and with the approaching Halloween – why not! (not that we celebrate Halloween much here in Australia – though some people do, and it appears to be getting bigger each year). I just lock the house and ignore the little kiddies trick or treating – hahahaha 😉

  3. This has the feeling of those old folk stories: they weren’t afraid of dread in those days. Fantastic piece, from the meter to the terrifyingly solid image of that cement boot anchor.
    Loved this.

    • You need to read my tags Stafford – I always give clues in my tags (‘no one I know’) – it is from my imagination (given that I haven’t died as yet – not to my knowledge, anyhow 😉 ) – though the character in the chair may be someone who I have stumbled across years ago – I often use snippets of real life to provide the backdrop to the poem (but I mix them up so no-one will know who they really are) – it is definitely not about me, though.

  4. I also love that the river appears in this… I picture the Brisbane River when I read the ‘cement-boot anchor’ reference at the end of the poem… Sadly, while this is fictional, there is alot of reality that pulses in these words.

    • Hi Brad – I really just wanted this one to be a basic ghost poem – not a social commentary – I think it is the last two lines giving that effect, so I might have to do a bit of rewriting – or turn it into two poems 🙂 thanks

      • Yeah. The last two lines – it was there that I made a mental rewind and imagined the voice of the ghost saying something like ‘your drinking will be the death of me’. Anyway, intended or not, I enjoyed this one Gabrielle.

    • I’d like to Selma – it was so much fun – I want to read more ghost stories too to get the hang of this type of tale 🙂 I am sure it was you that got me started on this ghost writing thing anyhow – haha – few months back (one of your ghost stories) – I always write a little note to myself to do a certain type of poem and then wait a while until the poem ferments in my brain – so thanks dude!

  5. I think you wrote narratively about dreams like this being fairly common, and that’s what I was thinking as I read it, while getting rather scared! Amazingly evocative picture poem! Transcends its dream origins, if that’s in fact where it did originate.

    • Haha – when I read it I see what you mean – it is an almost exact description of a hypnagogic hallucination, including the fact that the man is drunk and asleep in the chair and the inability to move and the feeling of terror – but I wasn’t thinking of that at all! Maybe I was subconsciously – how strange. I was just wanting to write a simple ghost tale Aletha 🙂

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