27 thoughts on “Reality Check

  1. Lovely, Gabrielle! Always happy to see poets playing with space and form. It’s rainy and dark here. You took me to a different kind of sky. 🙂

  2. By the way, I agree with your 7 year old daughter, the poem works even better without the word ‘bloody’. It focusses more on the last
    thought, making the point of the o=poem more strongly.

    1. Thanks Carolyn. I will muck about with it – you might be right. The problem is the ‘you’ll fall straight though’ looks too flat in comparison. The other problem is with this blog theme – it is a bit too narrow and that is why the first line has the ‘clouds’ on the second line. I will ponder some more.

    1. I actually like the word fall – has the sound that you would make as you go down and I like the shape of the letters like falling with your arms up over your head. When I say it in my head it is like faaaaaaaaallll. If you know what I mean. But thank you for the ideas. I do like plummet to but not for this one.

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