Thunder
How I much prefer the slow, rumbling thunder,
of a storm that is in no hurry to arrive,
that wants to give us fair warning to brace ourselves
for the wind and rain that will come our way,
much prefer the slow rumble in the distance,
angels let loose in the ten-pin bowling alley,
we give him a year to live, the doctors say
we’ll cut out that tumour,
we’ll mop up with chemo,
a series of body blows,
where the bloodied boxer
gets up time and time again
for more punishment,
and the onlookers
look on
helplessly,
hopefully
but the odds are against him,
rolling thunder,
prefer
(like preferring to be mauled by a vicious dog rather than a lion),
prefer it to the ear-splitting
CRACK
of thunder,
arriving
straight after
lightning,
a slither
of a moment
between them,
our house is hit
out of the black,
when we thought
we were safe
in bed,
when we thought life
was going pretty well,
CRACK
the news from the blue,
the knock on the door,
the police officers
with shifting feet,
CRACK
the news which
like a steel rod
breaks our legs,
and we slump
to the ground,
collapsing
in shock,
CRACK
the news which
readjusts the earth
beneath our feet,
the landscape changed
forever,
CRACK
the lightning
hits the house
the clock flies
across the room
the clock
stops.
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Note: This is a repost of a poem I wrote ages ago.
I don’t remember reading this one before. May have been written ages ago, but it has aged well.
Thanks Brad
I write it for Brian Borland, I seem to recall – he wrote a poem about dying slowly.
Good stuff, Gabrielle. I can’t guarantee I won’t quote, “angels let loose in the ten-pin bowling alley” next time we’re with the grandchildren during a thunderstorm.
Commenting from my experimental blog, ‘Mind Shortage’. Martin (Square Sunshine)
haha – quote away – I usually tell the kids God is bowling (when there’s a storm)
I’ll pop over to your experimental blog!
An electrical storm of note. Brilliantly done.
Thanks colonialist – a collage of actual events (house getting hit by lightning is imprinted on my mind …)
You have interwoven the sounds of the storm with the death sentence of the doctors – shock, strikes… Excellently done, Gabe.
Thanks adeeyoyo
I love repost, it gives us a chance to re-apreciate a beautiful poem!
Thanks Ben
makes me feel better about using a repost (always feel a bit guilty doing it).
The sounds of the storm give physical weight to the approaching death…a brilliant write..the images shall stay with me for quite a while.
Much appreciated Charles
Powerful, compelling poem, Gabe. Where the death of loved ones or myself is concerned, I think I prefer the thunder crack…
haha yes, I remember our conversation – I am not organised enough to die suddenly
Powerful, yes but thankfully an old one. I expected an explanation that, frankly had me on the edge of my seat with concern. Naughty girl!.
Oh Stafford – you mustn’t read my poems like an autobiography (though some are) – most of my poems relate to something that happened a few months earlier (at least) as my slow brain takes time to ponderate (and dream about the issues involved) – many are not about me at all!
True, Gabrielle. Life is not fair. It just happens, slow rumble or crack of thunder. It makes one feel so helpless.
There is nothing fair about life, I agree Kate. It does make one feel helpless (but I would argue that the slow death gives a little more control – or notice to get affairs in order and to soak it all in).
it so well captures the shock, it is beautifully written, and stunning
thanks tipota – it was the shock that I was focusing on, so you are spot on!
Still has that ‘WOW’ factor Gabe… chillingly good.
That means a lot coming from you Graham – thanks
That’s very good Gabe. It resonates as a good storm does. Belated (almost typed ‘bleated’!) new year’s greetings to you and yours
Thanks Geoff and right back at you and yours
Those thunder strikes, cracks, knocks and phone rings are like fire alarms of life.
exactly 47whitebuffalo
Your poems are wonderful and need to be experienced and reexperienced.
Thank you very much Aletha